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Section 6.14.2

Incomplete Comparisons

Incomplete comparisons detract from the clarity ofyour writing. To be complete, a comparison mustinclude both the item being compared and the item it is being compared with. Ifyou leave out the item being compared with, the reader may not understand yourintended meaning.


Unacceptable

Ecological modeling is more difficult. [More difficult than what?]

Acceptable

Ecological modeling is more difficult than hydrologicalmodeling.

--Norman Boucher, "Back to the Everglades," Technology Review(modified)

Unacceptable

Ever since the early 1960s, when the Corps of Engineers completed theCentral and Southern Florida Flood Control Project, the area's fresh water hasbeen shunted through 1,400 miles of canals and levees, 150 gates and spillways,and 16 of the largest pumping stations. [Largest where? In the project? In the area?]

Acceptable

Ever since the early 1960s, when the Corps of Engineers completed theCentral and Southern Florida Flood Control Project, the area's fresh water hasbeen shunted through 1,400 miles of canals and levees, 150 gates and spillways,and 16 of the largest pumping stations in the world.

--Norman Boucher, "Back to the Everglades," Technology Review(modified)


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