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Sentence: My mother is my biggest fan.
She always supported me in my pursuits. When I felt low, she would always
say the right thing. When I felt like giving up, she would encourage
me to keep trying. Now that I am successful, she says she always knew
I would be. I didn’t, but she did!
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Sentence: Some things are worse when they’re "improved."
A good cheesecake, for one thing, is perfect. It doesn’t need pineapple,
cherries, blueberries or whipped cream smeared all over it. Plain old
American blue jeans, the ones with five pockets and copper rivets, are
perfect too. Manufacturers only made them worse when they added flared
legs, took away the pockets, tightened the fit, and plastered white
logos and designers’ names all over them.
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Sentence: Television could be greatly improved.
If I were in charge of the nighttime programming on a TV network, I
would make changes. I would completely eliminate some shows. In fact,
all of the shows that proved of little interest would be canceled. Commercials
would also change, so that it would be possible to watch them without
wanting to turn off the TV set. I would expand the good shows so that
people would come away with an even better experience. My ideal network
would be a great improvement over the average lineup we see today on
any of the major networks.
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Sentence: An old car is much more economical than a new one.
Fourteen years ago, when my husband and I were newly married and nearly
broke, we bought the car--a shiny, red, year-old leftover--for a mere
$1,800. Today it would cost five times as much. We save money on insurance,
since it’s no longer worthwhile for us to have collision coverage.
Old age has even been kind to the Civic’s engine, which required
only three major repairs in the last several years. And it still delivers
twenty-six miles per gallon in the city and thirty-eight on the highway--not
bad for a senior citizen.
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Sentence: Waitressing is the worst job I ever had.
Restaurant customers can be so rude! They often said mean things or
did things that suggested they felt too impatient to be polite. Also
my boss expected me to do all kinds of extra jobs. And he expected me
to work for a really long time without a break. And on top of all that,
the other waitresses were just as unhappy as I was and really unreliable.
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Sentence: Owning a pet is a tremendous responsibility.
Some people don’t realize how much care a pet needs. They need many
things from their owners, but some owners don’t know this or don’t
care. Pets can be very sensitive and unless you have time for them,
you should not take on the responsibility of having one. Pets need more
than food. Like all of us, they need love and attention too.
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Sentence: The noise level in an office can be unbearable.
From nine o’clock to five, phones ring, typewriters clack and clatter,
intercoms buzz, and Xerox machines thump back and forth. Every time
the receptionists can’t find people, they resort to a nerve-shattering
public address system. And because the managers worry about the employees’
morale, they graciously provide the endless droning of canned music.
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